I'm not much of a fisherman. The only fishing I've ever done was with my father when he was in better health and I was a little girl. I picked this up because, while I know jack all about fly fishing, I thought it'd be a nice reminder of those times with my father.
The first thing I notice about this book is that there seem to be several blank pages. Are these meant to be illustrations? If so, there's nothing there. If they're not illustrations, then they should be deleted.
The next thing I notice is the one thing that I absolutely cannot stand in books, and that is the use of needlessly complicated sentences. Take this one for example:
"Later, I related my tale of frustration to my father. He scratched his chin and thought for a minute in his usual studying on the dilemma pose..."
This is such a contrived way of saying he told his father about fishing at the brook and his dad thought about the problem. It's not clever, it's annoying. If you use normal wording, it will be far easier to understand.
Also, after coming to this masterpiece:
"...not those hot ones where the only place ya want-a be is down at the drug store having a cherry coke and sneaking peaks at the counter girl’s chest, wondering if they really are that pointy."
I can say, without question, this book is only for straight men who have nothing better to do with their time than to be perverts and highly rude to women before she calls the police on them. It's offensive and creepy.
Also, the line after that, when the character Chick makes a comment, the story randomly tosses in script format. Why not stick to normal prose format and have: "Jeez, Art, where do you come up with this stuff?" Chick asked. Written as it should be, the reader will still understand that Art's story has ben interrupted.
Another story structure issue seems to be strange hyphens in the middle of words, such as 'inspiration' becoming 'inper-ation'. I can accept Turing 'what of' into 'what-a' a few lines earlier, as people often turn 'of' into 'a' or 'uh' when speaking, but otherwise, this looks like the story was written in another program and then was ported over, hyphen and all, to pdf. I can only assume that the original program took the word and hyphened it to maintain line appearance, as can happen in books when a word is separated.
Then there's this:
"I had one of those moments of inspir-ation. They got me in trouble more times than not in those days.” Chick got up and headed for the coffee pot. “Huh, some things never change.”
New action that interrupts the current action should always start a new paragraph. Also, anytime you write a word that ends with -ing, but drop the 'g', you need to place an apostrophe there. For example, if the word is "fishing", then you need to write "fishin'".
Honestly, if you are going for an accent, it's better to give a character a quirk as opposed to making strange punctuation decisions. Like constantly drop 'g' in -ing words. Or simply use 'a' all the time in place of 'of'. You want to push the idea of an accent without sacrificing sentence structure. If you do, you will immediately lose your audience as they stop to decipher what you have written. If it continues to be too difficult to read, then people will drop your book.
Lastly, concerning grammar and sentence structure, do not use the same word so soon after using it once before. Saying 'treating us to a wonder of fall foliage spilling over the overhanging rocks' is not enough time to use 'over' again. The sentence should read 'fall foliage spilled across the overhanging rocks'. You can phrase it how you'd like as long as the wording doesn't become redundant. If you don't want to use swearing, then don't put it in your story. There are perfectly fine adult men who do not swear. Censoring the characters makes the writing look childish and cartoonish. Better ways to have a character swear, but not swear, is to simply have something interrupts his dialogue. Maybe a huge fish just got away and the scene goes:
"Son of a bi-Hey! Dog, what are you doing with my tackle box? Get away from there!"
Over all, the biggest issue with An Angler's Tale seems to be with grammar and structure. The author needs to sit down with a list put together by an editor so that they can make changes and ask why what they did is wrong, thus learning from what he did wrong. I think more time learning how to write creatively and coherently would serve the author well for future books. As it stands, I cannot recommend this book to anyone outside of fly fishing. You will be uninterested and bored to tears. There's terminology used that goes right over the average readers head and the childish nature of the writing and characters make this impossible to recommend to more mature fly fishers.